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  • Hey all, just changed over the backend after 15 years I figured time to give it a bit of an update, its probably gonna be a bit weird for most of you and i am sure there is a few bugs to work out but it should kinda work the same as before... hopefully :)

Transformers: The Last Energon Crystal Teaser

Pretty cool man. How are you guys funding this? Kickstarter or something similar?
 
Very impressive! Definitely post the final product here when you finish it.
 
Very cool. Miles above most of the fan-film stuff out there.

Here comes the honest assessment part. The pacing of the edit is painful. The dips to black, aside from being irregular in length are too long. They're kinda overdone these days, but I still like them, so does Fincher; see the Dragon Tattoo teaser. :) In your teaser, a couple of the shots seem like they could be eliminated -- opening shot, as well as the one with the guy standing amidst the shelves. It feels as if the edit was stretched and filled to reach a certain length. A good teaser just teases and nothing more, some of the best are only 30~40s long...
 
Really cool stuff. I'm a big Transformers fan, so I can wait to see what else you do with it!
 
INCREDIBLE WORK for a few passionate friends getting together!! This should get everyone involved the respect they signed on for. I have to agree with Jeff though--

Jeff Kilgroe said:
A good teaser just teases and nothing more, some of the best are only 30~40s long...
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Trim the dips to black, come in just a bit shorter so your twitchy short attention span audience gets to see THE Transformers shot just a bit sooner. Even if you left it well enough alone, it would still be an incredible fan film trailer, it looks fantastic.

Thanks for posting it!
 
+1 for the pacing comment, but this is awesome. Your transform effects rock.

Please continue posting this stuff as you go.
 
Huge improvement. This is damn impressive work. I predict your get a lot of attention for this short once it's released. If this is what you can do at 19 years old and with $250 you have a big future ahead of you...


Here's an embed:


As far as constructive criticism goes: I think the textures on Optimus Prime could be a bit better. The model looks great and I am very impressed with the work overall, but if you are looking for something to improve on I think the textures could be a little bit more photo real. But that is me being really anal about it.

What programs did you guys use for the visual effects?
 
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Wording suggestions

Wording suggestions

The only suggestions I have would be in regards to word choice. It's too long winded and certain statements are reiterated for instance "the government". To which government are you referring? I wrote an example that might help you out.

In 1964 mankind witnessed the largest meteor shower in history.

According to (U.N.? What government) the meteorites burned up upon entering earths atmosphere.

All of them...Except one.
 
cool stuff.

try "burned out" instead of burned down. also, it should read "didn't burn" instead of didn't burned. you don't need to indicate past tense twice.

i also have to agree about pacing... if you're going to have the slow moments, i'd have some build up as well.
 
Rob, how long will the final short be? When do you expect to have it done?
 
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