30 Second bumper

[Stefan Scherperel]

This is my first posting in the "shot on red" forum. Recently we shot our company promotional trailer for 2009 and beyond. There is a 5 second a 10 second and 30 second version of this bumper. First post here is the 30 second version. Your opinions and thoughts are appreciated. Again this is for self promotional purposes, so the face of our company is being represented, so opinions are very important. Thanks

30 Second Promo
Quicktime http://208.109.217.2/Fueled-08/Fueled Bumper/LF720P.mov
WMV http://208.109.217.2/Fueled-08/Fueled Bumper/LF720P.wmv

10 Second Bumper
Quicktime http://208.109.217.2/Fueled-08/Fueled Bumper/SF720P.mov
WMV http://208.109.217.2/Fueled-08/Fueled Bumper/SF720P.wmv

For some reason, when encoding to wmv or h264 the blacks tend to be lifted quite a bit. If anyone has any suggestions as to how to keep black levels the same when encoding to these formats you'd be my best friend.

 

[Stefan Scherperel]

updated with Quicktime versions

 

[Giancarlo Bianchi]

Interesting concept and nice photography, congratulations.

I like the 10sec version better.
I think you just have to polish the tempo a little bit.
For instance I`ll start the second frame when the firsth can is somewhere in the middle, about 8 frames sooner. Start the third frame earlier two, and cut the second frame before he spreads the gas again.
And the final shot, cut just when he has the match infront of his chest starting the movement.
But like I said, that`s some polishing for my taste.

Happy New Year!

 

[mikeburton]

The 10 second bumper is great! Nice work!

 

[Stefan Scherperel]

Thanks for the detailed feedback Giancarlo. The 10 second version is the original concept for what we went out to shoot, so it is the most polished and will probably be the most used, as well as the 5 sec version. The 30 second version is one of those things that we are not sure about how we are going to use yet, except for the fact that it was fun to shoot and edit. I will definitly take your edits into consideration and talk with my director.
Again the comments are very much appreciated.

 

[Peter Strietmann]

I like the 30 second version. May have something to do with a personal experience I had when I was young and accidentally light an entire can of gas on fire. Perhaps more of a whoosh in sound design when the gas is ignited. Very well done though!

 

[Shawn Booth]

Stefan - both are very nice. But IMO both need to be polished up, tighter.

30 spot, when the guy throws the match - would like to see it cut in as he's throwing it. Lose the fat before the action. Like the concept behind the 30 more than the 10, but the TRT of 10 is better.

Any chance you could make the match flame blue?

 

[Stefan Scherperel]

Thanks for the great feedback, you guys. It is nice to come to a professional forum and get some real creative feedback.

We had thought about doing the flame blue, absolutly possible, just didn't have the time to do it yet for this version. I'll continue to play around with the edit and effects.

Again, all comments are much appreciated.